Doors Open A lady of grace Did eyes trace. Fowl a mouth, Ready for a bout. Make a body stupid. Words blaring putrid. Leaving the mind muted. Always in contrition for her diction. Those wishful days of bliss, Where it could end with a kiss. Never this, always a miss. Only open the door for one day m...

Drops Two drops in the sea, free from their antiquity. Anchored in others' heart Wish that they could part. Death's kiss, would be a sweet bliss. To unshackle heart's chains with this. Free to this dark abyss. Hearts bleed, two droplets freed, Wounds caused by an ebony bouquet. Two drops in the sea...

A Asimov thought Once a thought, thought of not. Then a body did it sought. After a body a life of fraught. So the body had a thought. Why not create another. Then there be a sister or brother. Lead to a father and mother. Seem grand for such a starter. For a bit more did the body barter. With one ...

We Ride Down the road,Normandy in hand. Ready for battle descend. In the rear childhood sits. Sweetness for world's dips. Fantasy crew fight evil's stew. Ready for fight true. That be ride's guide. Down the road we go for battle's sow. I really liked this piece. The first line made me think of the ...

Battlefield We dance as the bow, flow. Movement to match the pluck. Hoping for luck. Arrows rain bring red rose. Little hearts been pluck. Too bad no luck. Notes ranged for oppose, suppose. Heart's been pluck. Run out of luck. Death ballet, We play, Today. I like this piece. The fact that it has se...

Will you stop writing new things, I can't keep up :P Under the sea there be friends, three. Angel fish, sub, and Devil ray. Together through whatever may. Angel of reason, Devil of lust. Never know who to trust. When fear arise, reason leave. Lust of curiosity would proceed. So when a foe would ente...

I did not, my bad. I'll check it out in a bit and then re read Voices in my Head.

Hey, I had a quick look at your first post and your most recent two pieces are the first two on the list so I critiqued them first. Are there any pieces in particular you would like me to take a look at? If not I'll continue to work my way through them a little bit at a time. I should critique a gam...

The first one, you copied and pasted my thoughts on it. Not sure if you meant to or not. Figured I mention it. Not blind left with a sigh, just something that came out of me trying to rhyme with mind.Some poems are just me rhyming. Riding and A Sarcastic Wizard's tip are examples of that. Though Ac...

Hey I've decided that as I'm so slow and forgetful I'll critique your pieces a few at a time, starting with the two in your first post. ~ Mind If eye is to die, why not ask why? Not blind left with a sigh look how up and walk pass why. Why be blind to what you see, letting beauty die ignoring what b...