2 (80%~ Anti)
3 (60%+ Anti/40%– Neutral)
4 (40%– Anti/60%+ Neutral)
6 (60%+ Neutral/40%– Pro)
7 (40%– Neutral/60%+ Pro)
8 (80%~ Pro)
Not relevant to anything 'Valentines Day'
JeeCay's "Vile Day" Short Story submission for Pro VS Anti
(For details on voting, see next post).
Originally Posted by JeeCay?
Title: Vile Day
Piece: Short story
A small bit of a green powder, pinched between the fingers was all it took. Just a little was needed in each of the mixing pots. Too little and it had no effect. Too much and it was nearly fatal. Just a pinch of my miracle toxin was all that was needed too ruin that vile day. The fourteenth of February. A day reserved for the beautiful, the lucky, and more often than not the undeserving. But when has there ever been any justice in love?
I sat alone in a restaurant with a only a bottle of wine a small bag to keep me company. The restaurant in question was named some french word I dare not attempt to pronounce. So it should seem obvious that couples, on this of all days in particular, would flock to it. So I sat. All alone and waited. I drank my wine and waited. and when I saw a couple near me finishing their meal I laughed. Laughed and waited for the their waitress to appear.
"Would you two like a desert this evening. They're free for couples tonight only."
Music to my ears. It would cost me a pretty penny but to see it all first hand, To swim in their misery and see justice done on this unjust day would be well worth it. It was coming together. Fate had to be on my side for the timing to be this perfect. Within minutes of each other orders various desert orders came flooding into the kitchen. No time to check the batter, no time to inspect the icing, to check the fruits and creams for tampering. No time to ruin my work.
The sounds of young couples enjoying their unwarranted treats filled the air. It left a bitter taste, But would make what fallowed all the more delicious. My finely crafted toxin was truly miraculous. It took hold of their inner workings the moment it was devoured. When the first plate was cleared I reached into the bag at my side and maneuvered the item it housed over my head. I now breathed through a large filter and saw through a glass visor over my face. As the first set of eyes locked on to me I waved and smiled from beneath the mask. Happily anticipating the fruits of my labor when I heard it.
A loud, wet burst of air stemming from the bowels of a young lady sitting just few feet from me. As the eyes of those inhabiting the restaurant which can't be named shifted from me to her another one sounded off. This time it stemmed from her companion sitting across from her. A chorus of these abrupt, foul smelling eruptions rang clearly from the bottoms every couple that dared to exist on that day. None were spared from the carnage. The female patrons produced a stampede as they all sought refuge in the ladies room. The men who weren't embarrassed or nauseated by their involuntary flatulence regressed into a primitive state, Embracing their predicament for laughs, at the cost of their dates. Laughing, Crying, screaming. The sounds of plates and glasses shattering and tables tipped over and items were thrown. It all all gelled into a sympathy of chaos and anguished as a full scale riot erupted from pretentiously named establishment.
The night was ruined for all that came to dine at that atrociously named restaurant. All but me. All but me and the vengefully lonely individuals who would come to read this story in on every February fourteenth to come.
Voters, please read and rank JeeCay?'s submission on how you feel it ranks in terms of this Pro, Anti, and Neutral Event.
If you feel his piece is 100%-90% Against-V-Day or Anti-Love (anything that makes you think of V-Day or it's emotions to be a negative perspective), then select "Anti-100% 'Zero-0' " (If you feel it is a 1, please say so in your reasoning post).
If you feel it is neither Pro or Anti absolutely, then select, "Neutral-100% 'Five-5' ".
However, if you really feel that his piece is 100%-90% Pro-V-Day, Lovey-dovey and heart warming (anything that makes you think of V-Day or it's emotions to be a super positive perspective), select "Pro-100% 'Ten-10' " (If you feel it is a 9, please say so in your reasoning post).
You may vote in between these. Keep in mind that Ranking Votes between 0-3, will be Anti-Primarily; 4-6 will be Neutral Primarily and 7-10 will be Pro-Primarily. If you feel a submission is irrelevant to VDAY completely, select Option 10 (see grading below).
Each Vote Selections Standing/Meaning:
This particular voting range includes 1, so if you rate it 90% Anti-V-Day, then select this and then state your reasoning in a post.2 (80%~ Anti)3 (60%+ Anti/40%– Neutral)
This is an Anti predominate vote; however, you feel it is clearly more Anti than Neutral.4 (40%– Anti/60%+ Neutral)
This is a Neutral predominate vote; however, you feel it is clearly more Neutral than Anti.Neutral-100% 'Five-5'
Neither Pro nor Anti Valentines Day, but clearly relevant to V-Day.6 (60%+ Neutral/40%– Pro)
This is a Neutral predominate vote; however, you feel that it is clearly more Neutral than Pro.7 (40%– Neutral/60%+ Pro)
This is a Pro predominate vote; however, you feel that it is clearly more Pro than Neutral.8 (80%~ Pro)Pro-100% 'Ten-10'
This particular voting range includes 9, so if you rate it 90% Pro-V-Day, then select this and then state your reasoning in a post.Not relevant to anything 'Valentines Day'
Select this option if you read the piece and could not find how it had any baring on ideals involving VDay, i.e. romance is not involved, chocolates, roses, colors, emotions or feelings commonly present etc. This also includes a lack of position, i.e. Anti-, Pro-, or Neutral.
Giving Voters a chance to earn while the participants earn awards.
What do I mean by this?
There are awards for the submissions based on voters, which will be handed out based on the average scoring when all voting is said and done. Now, voters who say what they feel is the "true" rating of the poem will determine whether or not the piece follows Anti, Pro, or Neutral. If the piece is voted as a majority ruling of the same ranking the author felt their piece was, all voters who matched the authors personal ranking (this was disclosed to Shadow in PM) will get 1000 credits. Those who vote on every piece will get 500 Credits, but a critique/reasoning must be given for a vote to count. After this, Voters can decide who they feel had the best piece for the entire event. A special award will be given to the 1st, 2nd and 3rd for this "take it all" winning award. (This will follow after all voting has been done on each submission.)
Time Line: A Week from the Voting Thread start or at least 15 Voters.
How vote reasoning posts should look like:
Originally Posted by §hadow
I voted a Rank of 1 because it was made clear the main character despised the day. However, what fermented the idea, thoughts and feelings were clearly unraveled through out the story. It was cleverly written save for the obviousness of the hatred to the day. It was also humorous in a twisted way, which really did add to the atmosphere. I must say it was quite entertaining and leaves room for the imagination to take root in the conversations that might have followed between couples when they went home that evening.
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Last edited by Shadow; 04-11-2012 at 10:54 PM.
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I voted one, as he states right at the start that it's a vile day so it's clearly anti v-day. As a concept though, i really like it as i've never had a good valentines day.
I voted 100% anti. definitely doesn't sound keen. Title kinda gives it away too.
Thank you guys for voting, could we please have more voters and their thoughts please?
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Hopefully this is the last valentines day thing, lol. I don't know anything about it, so I picked neutral again, lol.
Voted anti. It is pretty negative about Valentine.
I find the story doesn't really follow through. Given the mayhem caused, and this protagonist just sitting there with his mask, one would have assumed at least some men would have picked a fight. Saying 'their day was ruined while I sat happily watching it all' was just too easy an ending.
It's funny it could be either or really. Considering they character is the only one having a good day and all the others are pretty much having the worst day of their lives. I think I'm neutral on this. Though you can think of it as Anti as well since obviously they don't like valentines day as well.
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I think its 100% anti because they are revelling in the damage they are causing to the day
@JeeCay? This is your thread, also could you reply to my pm Pweeeeaaaassseee <3 Thanks
I could've sworn I did. Oh well I have an inconsistent brain so maybe I imagined it.
Lol. That's alright. Thanks very much. ^^ I'll reply to it/read it after I vote myself. LOL
Please, others out there... Vote? LOL
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Last edited by Shadow; 04-11-2012 at 11:00 PM.
Even without the plot itself , the narrative is clearly against Valentine's.
I gave this one a 2 since its the opposite of what v-day stands for... thats about it...
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It is completely anti v-day so I voted Anti-100%.
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